The Word Cloud

You might look at me
with your blushed pink face
Your hard pimpled complexion
But above it all I know
that your sharp edged
square attitude is all a bluff
For/Four cornered
we can all see that you really are
two faced so double the math still
just a slab
standing the test of time
waiting to be cracked through age
when your crevices may be filled
smoothed over
to tidy your appearance
and make seem renewed
a little younger cosmetically
by the touch of skilled hands
steady in their chosen profession
Yet at the end of the day
everyone knows
you are just going to get walked over

I'm tempted to say, 'A bit pedestrian' - but only for the joke; I thing this is good, I didn't guess before the end, just knew something was up Nice one, anasnais

Thankyou Tony, lol. Careful not to step on the lines with those jokes now! Smiles, thanks for your comment, glad you could see where this was going. I'm a little concerned as to whether I need alter punctuation to break it up a little, there seens to be a huge sentence running through and that concerns me somewhat. That said, I was trying to keep up a kind of cocky talk through it to go with what was being said and how if said in life it would perhaps all come tumbling out... I don't know it's just thoughts right now... Maybe a few more voices will see me right? Good to see you here Tony... kindest thoughts, Anna-Marie.

It can all be read as one sentence. I took the lack of punctuation as a 'poetry thing'. The line breaks work as very effective punctuation. And, come to think of it, I think I would do away with the odd capital letter that you have used to start a few lines. Go for broke: one sentence. The other thing which sort of breaks it up a bit is the for/four. I couldn't quite see how 'for' would fit, but why not just says 'four'?

'For cornered' I was hoping should be able to be read like if we were cornered and pressured into opinion so to speak.... Yes, the line breaks should act to break up poetry, and so you don't need all the commas, but not sure about taking out full stops and capital letters yet, need give it more thught and get a afeel as to any feedback re flow etc. I suppose there will always be someone Iupset whichever way I do it, but would like toknow which way would be correct way to present this... Yes, I to can see it as one long ramble of fever pitch! Thanks for taking the time out to come back on this... Much appreciated, kindest thoughts, Anna-Marie.