By Madison, aged 10
Here 'tis.
Chapter 1
The Poster
“Kids its time to go to school, come and get your lunches!” Miss Cotton called.
“But I don’t want to go to school, its BORING!” Harry replied.
“Yes it is boring, boring, boring!” chanted Lilly.
"I’m sorry but you have no choice! Now have a good day, I’ll see you later, oh Harry, look after your sister on the bus will you? You know what she’s like!”
“Fine, bye!”
This is a normal morning in the Cotton’s house but they are not normal people. Harry is a 10 year old boy who likes football and music. Lilly is a cute little 4 year old girl who will agree to anything and loves pink! But Miss Cotton has a very different personality! She loves fruit – especially bananas, is a very good climber – have you guessed yet? She’s a Gorilla! It’s very hard for her because she can’t go and get a job! I mean wouldn’t you be a little bit shocked if, when you went down to Waitrose to buy your dinner you went to pay and you were being served by a talking Gorilla! So when the kids got home from school with some great news she was delighted!
“Mum, Mum, you will never guess what the poster said out side the burger shop today!” said Harry.
“What? Tell me!”
“It says they are looking for a griller to help them out and that they would be paid and everything!”
“You’re having a laugh!”
“No, no it’s true! You have to go and see if they will give you the job, but you have to ring first at this number,”
As Harry was reading out the number from his hand all Miss Cotton could think about was what she was going to say! The only humans she had ever spoken to were Harry and Lilly.
“Come on ring!” insisted Harry.
“Ok, Ok, I’m doing it!”
As she pressed green and it started to ring she new it was
a bad idea but she just thought about Harry and Lilly, they were
tight on money so she waited and waited and waited and – “Hello,
Mrs. Jones speaking, can I help you?”
“Umm….. yes….. well…. I saw the poster in your shop window
and…..”
“Oh yes, we have been hoping some one would call! Where do you
live?”
“Just next door to you actually!”
“Oh great well can you start now or do you have
plans?”
“Well I don’t have plans exactly but I have to kids with
me.”
“Oh don’t worry they might like to help make the burgers.”
“Yeah I’m sure they’d love that, thank you.”
“No problem can you come round now then, oh you will need to will out a couple of forms when you get here but that’s ok nothing to serious don’t worry.”
“Ok see you in a minute!”
Miss. Cotton put the phone down – “YAY I got the job!”
“Yay yay yay!” Repeated Lilly making everyone laugh!
“That’s great mum! When do you start?” Asked Harry
“Now, put on you shoes and jackets you too!” Answered Miss. Cotton.
“What you want us to come too?!” Questioned Harry.
“Well I can’t leave you to here on your own can I?!
So they walked next door to the burger shop but when the got there there were lots of screams! Miss. Cotton froze, to scared to speak.
“Why are you so shocked?” Asked Harry.
“Well in case you haven’t noticed a Gorilla just walked into my shop!” Yelled Mrs. Jones in fright.
“But you said you wanted a griller for your shop!”
“Yes a griller not a Gorilla a griller to grill the burgers!”
“But if you don’t want a Gorilla then the zoo will take our mum and we will have to leave her forever!” Said Harry Scared.
“Well that’s not my fault!” Said Mrs. Jones, angry now.
“Meanwhile, Miss. Cotton was going red in the face tears pouring from her eyes – scared herself. “What are we going to do?”
“I don’t know mum.”
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22 Comments
It makes me want to read on as well.
Well done hun. Great little story started there.
Good luck if you choose to make it bigger.
:o)
GD, you have a very talented daughter. I bet she was over the moon with her response too.
The characters seem spot on and she obviously has a great imagination.
I have kind of started on a book called "what if?" just 4 fun it is very different 2 the 1 u have read but dad seems 2 like it!
I don't think i will carry on with this 1 at the moment but i think i am with the other! thank u again madison
Griller, hee, hee!
What a great first chapter, I really want to know what happens next!
But now I know who really writes the stuff your dad posts on The WordCloud...you!
Keep writing.
Madison
xx
Mac
Awww... I don't think I'd sleep with excitement if I had these comments on any of my stuff! Nite Madison... ;)
The same guy came to a local school near me and seemed a real hit with the kids. I'm just about to start a scheme to help children with their reading and writing and it's fab news to know that some little ones have a real talent hidden away.
Let's see what I can find xx
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