The Word Cloud

3 Comments

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  by Ron Blanco 11 months ago

  Very funny MrD.
  
  The bits I liked best:
  
  "That was fine." I will be chuckling about that one intermittently during the day.
  "... a firm 6/10 for looks." Again, very funny.
  "... don't expect fireworks, I try my best to get the job done." Very good, but I would lose the remainder of that sentence.
  
  Other bits I quite liked:
  
  "5'9 in my socks." Although technically perhaps it should be 5'9" - especially considering Dan's unreasonable apostrophe obsession.
  "Do not call me after 9.30pm..."
  
  Room for improvement:
  
  Well, I did wonder if Dan's laid back outlook on life was at odds with his strong conservative bent. Young(ish) conservatives are normally annoyingly confident and forthright aren't they? I'd have him down as someone who votes for the Monster Raving Loonies, judging as he does that "they're all as bad as eachother". His apostrophe-angst also seemed a little out of sync with his amiable nature. But I haven't read the rest of your story, so perhaps I have jumped to conclusions about his character.
  
  Just my thoughts. Thanks for the laughs.
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  by Gerilyn 11 months ago

  This really did make me laugh out loud. I liked the apostrophe ref so don't agree with Mr Blanco on that score but all the other bits he found amusing- I did too. The ''More about me'' paragraph made me laugh the most. :D
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  by MrD1990 11 months ago

  Thank you both very much for the feedback. Yeah, he's based on a chap I know with his political leanings and general outlook on life, he like many turned to the Conservative party after Gordon Brown's reign and constantly moans about Brown messing up his life. This little blog was literally written in 5-10 minutes, it was originally going to go into the novel, but it just fleshed up the character more, so I put it on my blog.
  I put it here, so that you'd get a general feel for the character and why he's the chap you see in the script. But, thank you both very much for reading and replying, it's very much appreciated. I might add the other blogs I've done about the characters in the future.