Learning to Fly

Published by: lovecrime on 19th Apr 2010 | View all blogs by lovecrime

She stands, with head held high,
arms outstretched.
Silver skeins of sanity
unfurl like curling ribbon
to fall in a puddle
on the street far below.
Steel and concrete do not feel pain,
sentiment won’t hold her back,
all love tastes of betrayal.
She takes a deep breath
of car-polluted air,
closes her green eyes
and steps, smiling, into the sky.

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2 Comments

  • Tony
    by Tony 2 years ago
    This made me cry a little bit. I hope it doesn't reflect your own feelings, that would be very worrying. I'd like you to message me if there's anything you need to talk to someone about - I'm a good listener!
  • Minxie
    by Minxie 2 years ago
    I agree. I felt really sad reading this. The person seems so unfeeling and almost relieved to be ending it all. So final.

    I love the way you've described her sudden knowledge of what she has done before she hits the unfeeling ground below.

    It's full of emotion but very cold.

    Fantastic writing.

    Minxie
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