no title - could call it 'Damned to Hell'
This is
an idea that's been bouncing around in my head for a while.
It's not got any further,but I've not really worked on it either
beyond what's written here.
Fellow Cloudbase personnel - comments are welcome
Perspectives
As his life slips away along with the blood seeping through his
fingers from the wound in his chest and losing the battle against
the advancing darkness, utters his last words to the man
stood over him with the smoking gun, 'Damn you, Damn you to
hell'
or
He looks down at the man laying at his feet, its life having
no choice but to surrender to the approaching darkness. His
white knuckled hand slowly eases its grip on the smoking gun as
the adrenalin rushing through his veins begins to slow. The
taste of vengeance was sweet and satisfying. The dieing
mans last words echoed through the following silence, threatening
to haunt him. Haunt him to eternity.
What brought him to stand here? A mild, gentle natured
well loved man who would never say a harsh word about
anyone. What brought him to purchase this gun for the sole
purpose of taking this mans life?
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This might just be one of those learning curve things for me, to look at character perspectives to help make better sense of who's point of view to write from etc.
I did have a name for the man with the gun, but afraid I wasn't quick enough to grab it. I'm sure it will peep out of the corner in fell into somewhere up there in my noggin. :o)
I think the past may well work better for the first view. I'll have to wait and see if that takes me anywhere? the scene plagued my head in the supermarket when shopping a couple of months ago so will wait and see.
thanks again both
:o)
Nibs
I kind of like both versions, but I gues the second is better for just that reason, I was more descriptive, hopefully without going overboard. :o)
Shall see if it takes me anywhere.
:o)
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