Song for the Journey

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Published by: ianmitchell on 10th Oct 2009 | View all blogs by ianmitchell

Maybe when the lights begin to fade
And every fire that burned's just dying embers
And father time has rained on our parade
You'll look me in the eye and we'll remember
When all's been said & done
In whatever has become
That you and I were friends for the journey

And every time a friendship’s been betrayed
Become the victim of some misdemeanour
Bewildered by mischievous masquerade
Or bruised because the game became much meaner
My ragged smile inside
Was easier to find
When you and I were friends for the journey

As certainties unravel and unfold
And mystery starts whispering on my shoulder
And all that was important’s being told
You’ll read it on my face when we are older
Traced upon my times
And weaved between my lines
That you and I were friends for the journey

You’re traced upon my times
You’re weaved between my lines….

And you and I are friends for the journey

Comments

5 Comments

by mike 2 years ago

I liked the repetition at the end of each verse. I's all very clear and put me in mind of a pop ballad, i don"t know why? When you and i were friends for the journey some sort of song lyric? I liked the non sexual nature of the poem and the emphasis on friendship.
by Weens 2 years ago

This is fabulous.I agree with Mike, it does remind me of a song. Perhaps you could now write some music for it. LOL. Your rhymes are very clever, you should have a go at this month's competition.
by CyprusRachael 2 years ago

I liked this and found that it also reminded me of a song. Would be interested to see more of what you write.
by Tony 2 years ago

Charming verse, Ian. Do you have a melody for it? As I read it I could practically hear the lyrics wafting through the open door of a pub off Grafton Street late on a summer's evening, with the smell of Guiness and Bushmills lingering delightfully in the Dunlin air.

(If it is has a tune, no doubt the repeated last line works exactly to the music, but it is the one phrase that scans differently form the rest.. Did you consider, "And you and I were friends along the way" which preserves the meter?)
by Netta 2 years ago

Nice!

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