The Word Cloud

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  by mike 1 year ago

  It is a good introduction. A feisty young girl dragging a suitcase along a dusty road, and I liked the ending with the acceptance of a lift and the appearance of another car in pursuit. But, perhaps, you have told too much of the story inbetween the two events? I did feel, a bit, that you were giving too much information to the reader at the expense of telling a story though narrative or character.
  But i am not much of a critic, i am afraid.